As I’ve been working on the edits for my soon-to-be-published novel, one of the things my editor has knocked me for is telling instead of showing. In romance writing, it’s all about how the characters are feeling. It’s much more effective to take the reader right inside the character’s head, rather than simply to say, “Leah was angry. She was beginning to think Brad might be lying to her about the money.” Saying that characters seem, realize, think, are beginning to, or are starting to is a huge pitfall for me. It’s a detached way of talking about characters. One of my editing tricks is to search for instances of think, thought, seem, and similar words and eliminate them when possible. At least 75% of the time, there is a better way.
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