A snippet from my WIP, a historical western, Nobody’s Bride. My hero is a tortured Civil War vet who has moved to Texas to work in the cattle business. The inescapable violence of the world he lives in often triggers flashbacks to his worst combat experiences. In this scene, after he’s shot a deer for venison and now must butcher it, my heroine Maddy starts to realize the extent of his problem. I’ll be interested in your honest reaction. Does this kind of “weakness,” for lack of a better word, make you think less of a hero?
“From the wagon, Maddy watched him walk toward the deer, knowing somehow he was in trouble. Reluctance had been etched in every line of his body as he’d prepared to drop the deer. He’d done it efficiently and without delay, but after the shot rang out, she realized what it had cost him.
Now that he’d done the deed, she could see the dread in him as he slowly made his way to the dead doe. And when he bent over and emptied the contents of his stomach, her heart ached for him.
Something awful had happened to him during the war. “
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